Tan Renga Challenge #28

In response to Carpe Diem Tan Renga Challenge #28, “a silent cry”

The goal is to write a second stanza of two-lines (following 7_7 syllables) towards the given haiku written by  Chèvrefeuille

flight of the eagle
stepping into the world of dreams -
a silent cry

(c) Chèvrefeuille

Here is my try:

flight of the eagle
stepping into the world of dreams –
a silent cry

journey through the forgotten
the rising moon lights the way

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20 thoughts on “Tan Renga Challenge #28

  1. Wow! You’re right! Must be something to do with … great minds think alike! Very nicely done, if I may say so!

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  2. having the moon to light the way, puts everything back into proper perspective – finding solutions naturally. great expressions.

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      1. You are a true artist. I won’t say anything to interfere, but as a reader of the renga I felt you made it, and therefore me soar for a few moments. 5 haiku have this year – two from you. For me this is very rare, and what I really like about haiku. I do not even dare try the renga, too difficult.

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    1. I’m really flattered, but I’m afraid that you maybe a little overestimated me.
      I tried a couple of times, but somehow I’m not satisfied with the result.
      Maybe it would be easier not to write in English, I do not know. 🙂
      On the other hand, I must admit that I am attracted by doing things that I have never done before so… I really need someone to “push me”.
      Well, I made another try…

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      1. REALLY! Wonderful. I will go see. I understand you might not be happy with the result, but that is the artist, the writer and poet speaking. What is more important is you feel no pressure. Don’t think I overestimate..sure, there will be some not-so-good pieces, but I have seen pearls. I agree about someone gently pushing. When I see real talent I worry it might get wasted and want to help get the best..You have it in you. You know you do.

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