Cold Bites

In response to TAN RENGA INVITATION: A SILENT CRY by Brenda 

The goal is to write a second stanza of two-lines (following 7_7 syllables) towards the given haiku written by Brenda

arctic air crushes
frost settles over rivers
cold bites off dreams 
(by Brenda)

Here is my try:

arctic air crushes
frost settles over rivers
cold bites off dreams

every bite rips piece of skin
leaves me bare in solitude

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6 thoughts on “Cold Bites

  1. Ruthless rejoinder! Love it! Does describe the extreme cold well, in how it takes its pound of flesh from us. Thanks for joining in, this has been a fun party game! Cheers, Brenda

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