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Cold Bites

26 Jan

In response to TAN RENGA INVITATION: A SILENT CRY by Brenda 

The goal is to write a second stanza of two-lines (following 7_7 syllables) towards the given haiku written by Brenda

arctic air crushes
frost settles over rivers
cold bites off dreams 
(by Brenda)

Here is my try:

arctic air crushes
frost settles over rivers
cold bites off dreams

every bite rips piece of skin
leaves me bare in solitude

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6 responses to “Cold Bites

  1. Brenda

    26/01/2014 at 1:28 pm

    Ruthless rejoinder! Love it! Does describe the extreme cold well, in how it takes its pound of flesh from us. Thanks for joining in, this has been a fun party game! Cheers, Brenda

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    • Sky Vani

      27/01/2014 at 12:20 am

      Thank you very much, Brenda. I am glad that you liked it. It is a fun party game, I really like it. So, count me in next time! 🙂

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      • Brenda

        27/01/2014 at 1:43 am

        Excellent! Glad I’m not the only crazy poet out there. 🙂

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      • Sky Vani

        27/01/2014 at 1:46 am

        hmm … no, not at all! I’m mad mathematician who imagines herself as a poet. glad to meet you! 😀

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      • Brenda

        27/01/2014 at 2:41 am

        Ah, another math person!! I am surrounded by them. Pleased to meet you, too. 🙂

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      • Sky Vani

        27/01/2014 at 8:15 am

        Then, I don’t have to explain anything… 😀

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