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Desire

03 Apr

Days In The Blackberries Field

behind closed window
darkness fills the smoky air
ashtray full of butts

For Carpe Diem #437, Desire

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5 responses to “Desire

  1. Chèvrefeuille

    03/04/2014 at 9:16 am

    A nicely composed haiku. I had some difficulty with finding the hidden desire in this one, but that last line brought it to me after a while. Chapeau!

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    • Sky Vani

      03/04/2014 at 7:55 pm

      i know… too complicated for a haiku… there is the darkness behind the window to hide a desire; burnt cigarettes give a false picture that is extinguished, but the smoke in the air is a traitor. cheers! 🙂

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      • Chèvrefeuille

        03/04/2014 at 8:29 pm

        But … it’s an awesome haiku … vrry well done

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  2. readinpleasure

    03/04/2014 at 12:26 pm

    Desire for cigs causing all the smoke. Great!

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  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    04/04/2014 at 8:37 pm

    I read a desire of things not really allowed here.. there is a sense of a forbidden desire here.

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