Tanka For The Rose

08 Jul

Days In The Blackberries Field

Oh, beautiful rose,
why are you withered early?
Calling out your name
mother’s tears on the coffin
today cannot wake you up.

For Carpe Diem Ghost Writer #16, Jen of Blog It or Loose It on ”Tanka by Shiki”


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23 responses to “Tanka For The Rose

  1. moondustwriter

    08/07/2014 at 5:55 pm

    a sad and teary reality. You have painted the scene well


  2. Gunn's Cabin Fever

    08/07/2014 at 6:14 pm



  3. arushiahuja

    08/07/2014 at 6:47 pm

    so sad yet so beautiful!!


    • Sky V

      09/07/2014 at 9:56 pm

      Thank you, I am glad if I succeed to paint the scene.


  4. Blog It Or Lose It

    08/07/2014 at 8:55 pm

    Ouch– this is beautiful, but it also felt like being punched in the stomach (poetically speaking) — the pain, the mother’s tears at losing her flower — an exquisite tanka.


    • Sky V

      08/07/2014 at 9:07 pm

      I know, I’m sorry. I’m still under impression of something that I watched in a real life. Too sad, life is sometimes so unfair.


      • Blog It Or Lose It

        08/07/2014 at 9:13 pm

        Nothing to apologize about — sometimes poetry stings.
        I’m so sorry that you witnessed this in a real life — sending healing thoughts to you and to the family.


      • Sky V

        08/07/2014 at 9:26 pm

        Thank you, Jen. She was not my blood family but my ex pupil who I met as shy 10 years old girl. She was someone who constantly reminded me what is the biggest value of my profession. Your post on CD was so beautiful and touching, thank you.


      • Blog It Or Lose It

        08/07/2014 at 10:41 pm

        Oh, what a horrible loss — I am so sorry.


  5. Mark M. Redfearn

    08/07/2014 at 10:24 pm

    Even though tears are sometimes futile, we cannot help but weep…

    Peering Under the Bean Leaves


  6. Bastet

    09/07/2014 at 9:47 am

    The saddness of this tanka shakes the soul, that life withers in our children is one of the most terrible tradgedies of life.



    • Sky V

      09/07/2014 at 9:58 pm

      Unfortunately things like this happen. Only mother knows her pain.


      • Bastet

        10/07/2014 at 3:12 am

        Yes, I have to agree on both counts 😦


  7. readinpleasure

    09/07/2014 at 1:57 pm

    So heartbreaking. My sympathies, Sky.


  8. magicalmysticalteacher

    09/07/2014 at 2:36 pm

    The beautiful things and people in our lives seem always to leave too soon…

    Cradling Next Summer


  9. Chèvrefeuille

    10/07/2014 at 12:24 am

    A beautiful tanka Sky full of strong emotions … thank your sharing your tears here.


    • Sky V

      10/07/2014 at 12:54 am

      Dear Kristjaan, I am grateful to you every day for the wonderful posts and constant inspiration. 🙂



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