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Law of the power (Закон јачега)

20 Sep

intently watching
piece of bread in the craw’s beak
sparrow on the wire

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врабац на жици
чежњиво гледа комад хлеба
у вранином кљуну

Inspired by Carpe Diem #566, Crow

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21 responses to “Law of the power (Закон јачега)

  1. Chèvrefeuille

    20/09/2014 at 9:44 pm

    Wonderful haiku Sky … and that Russian translation is great …

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    • Sky V

      20/09/2014 at 9:52 pm

      Thanks, Kristjaan. In fact, this is Serbian, my native language. 🙂 It really sounds like Russian a bit. Or Bulgarian… And I was thinking… Because I made a small break with writing, maybe it is a good chance to start with something new. I like changes and I want to try to write haiku in my language. It is not easy as I thought. Not easy at all… 🙂

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      • Chèvrefeuille

        20/09/2014 at 9:57 pm

        Sorry I really thought it was Russian … Serbian looks quit a like … good to se you here again Sky. It’s sometimes good to step back and watch at the side-line … it gives you insight in your further path … its somewhat alike with standing on a crossroads … time to contemplate and make new plans … I hope to read more Serbian haiku … with translation please 🙂

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      • Sky V

        20/09/2014 at 10:04 pm

        No need to be sorry. While I was a student I prepared the most of my exams from Russian books about math. I have never learned Russian, but I could understood them. And, thank you. I will continue writing in English, but I will try to add another version. When I translate it literally somehow it doesn’t look nice so I need to change it. I will work on it 🙂

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      • Chèvrefeuille

        20/09/2014 at 10:08 pm

        I am looking forward … I know what you mean by the way. I sometimes translate my English haiku into Dutch (my maiden language), but in a way it never gives me the same feeling …

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      • Sky V

        20/09/2014 at 10:17 pm

        Maybe all is in terms of habits

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  2. Suzanne

    20/09/2014 at 10:12 pm

    I love the visual impact of your Serbian words – although I cannot read them. I think putting your haiku into two languages is very powerful – it adds to the impact.

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    • Sky V

      20/09/2014 at 10:15 pm

      Thank you so much for your encouragement, Suzanne. I will do my best. At the moment it has my attention giving me a nice fun. 🙂

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  3. Mark M. Redfearn

    20/09/2014 at 11:19 pm

    I wonder if that sparrow is going to be in trouble soon…

    Crow

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    • Sky V

      21/09/2014 at 9:20 am

      Fortunately not, but remained hungry 🙂

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  4. artmusedog

    21/09/2014 at 12:16 am

    Great visual with the ‘sparrow’ watching ~ well penned haiku

    artmusedog and carol (A Creative Harbor)

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  5. J

    21/09/2014 at 12:40 am

    Oh, I’m loving that you have both English and Serbian here!
    Power, indeed — a show-down between the crow and the sparrow — just exquisite.

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    • Sky V

      21/09/2014 at 9:25 am

      Hello, J! 🙂 I like your new nick, especially because J is the first letter of my name also 🙂 Thank you much for the support and nice words.

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      • J

        21/09/2014 at 4:42 pm

        🙂
        You’re very welcome!

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  6. Oloriel

    21/09/2014 at 8:32 am

    Procitala sam jos na Fbu i moram da ti kazem da na nashem mnogo bolje zvuci, ne znam je li slicnost bila namerno,ali me podseca na sta bi bilo da je Aesop pisao Haiku 😀

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    • Sky V

      21/09/2014 at 9:31 am

      Sličnost nije bila namerna, ali je scena i mene podsetila na basnu o gavranu i lisici. Samo što ovaj vrabac nije bio lukav nego je jadničak čekao u nadi 🙂 I hvala za ovo – bolje zvuči na našem – uhvatila sam sebe da sam zaboravila da se izražavam srpskom.

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      • Oloriel

        21/09/2014 at 9:43 am

        Imam isti problem, al eto vidish, ipak je to uvek i zauvek u nama 🙂

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  7. magicalmysticalteacher

    21/09/2014 at 1:18 pm

    The elusive piece of bread…

    Too Early for Crows

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  8. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    23/09/2014 at 6:58 pm

    Sometimes the sparrow has to be patient…

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