a lonely leaf
torn away in December night
aimlessly wanders
Linked to Carpe Diem #1094 Trio for Violin, Cello and Piano Op. 17 Allegro Moderato by Clara Schumann
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Baigneur de Fôret
12/12/2016 at 11:29 pm
Solitary maybe, but a lonely leaf…..not sure leaves get lonely. Saying it is is telling the reader instead of showing. Apart from that nice haiku..
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Sky D Sky
13/12/2016 at 12:05 am
I know, you’re right. I wanted to write only “a leaf” but it was too short when I read it. Another version was “a single leaf” but I put “lonely” and don’t know why 🙂
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Baigneur de Fôret
13/12/2016 at 7:22 am
I think a single leaf is very nice and possibly stronger than lonely. In fact more I think about it the more powerful it is. Interesting.
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